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Original poem reprinted online here:  "Ornament" by Dore Kiesselbach Originally read: January 1, 2013 More information about the Poet: Dore Kiesselbach So I wrote this at the end of the poem, "The end is meh -- the over usage of '-ed' sounds.  The intro of a non-linear image -- it's a part that highlights 'I'm an epiphany pay attention to me' when the narration felt strong."  When reading this poem over again, I stumbled over the last three words "varnished / feathers shined."  It's a part where I had to slow down and reread the part, and maybe that's what the last three words supposed to do; however, I found the narration in the poem more intriguing and the last lines just jumbled. Fore example, I wrote about repetition, "I really like the repetition like this 'marks beside / marks' 1) It'd be too kitchy if the line ended there. 2) Since it keeps going the idea is strong but contrasts/confirms the sentiment...

Original poem reprinted online here: Analysis of "Coal" by Audre Lorde Originally read: December 18, 2012 More information about the Poet: Audre Lorde I read this poem again out loud and I wrote this on stanza two my first read: "I could see the attraction of the extended metaphor -- this is more of a performance through sound and    loose image; yet, all phantoms -- dead metaphors stacked on dead metaphors doesn't create life -- only a reminder of the dead" Yeah, I don't know what was going through my mind that day.  Today though I liked the play of simile,  I don't know why.  Each simile describes how the speaker views words to say "diamonds" "adders" and "gypsies over my tongue to explode through my lips."  Okay so the exploding gypsies one doesn't work for me -- there's surreal and there's just silly. Anyway, I wrote this at the end of the poem, "the construction of this...I tknow why it'll work beca...